Storylines and storyboards

I want both of my main adverts to be showing the audience how many of the everyday tasks we perform can easily collect germs and just generally get our hands quite dirty. I want to present this in a fun way that gives the viewer more of a connection. So for my first advert, I have storyboarded my idea

In the first frame we see the hand is walking over to the bed, at this point I am going to have an over voicing of "Oh what a day" which is my connection that will make the viewer feel empathy to what they subconsciously do with their hands

My second advert in the real world would be aired after the first at such a time that people would understand my advert. I am going to take advantage of this by showing more of hands getting dirty.